January 7th, 2009

Chapter 01 Page 07

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  1. TheDapMan

    – Now(,) 3000 Years later(;) the stage is set for one unique individual.

    -A young man known as… The Demon Fist.

    In terms of bubble placement, I would try to move them around so that Rory and the two henchmen image is uninterrupted. I would also cut the length of the tails.

    Also Bolden the names of new characters not yet introduced to the reader. It shows the reader that 1: It is a name and not a verb and 2: its an important name to remember.

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